Comments : Violent Blue

  • 8 years ago

    by StandStill

    All small talk aside
    I'm so sorry it hurts
    You're not acknowledging that
    I don't know what's worse

    ^^ Last stanza was my favourite, but this was the runner up...it really stung. i don't know. it's relatable. I'm sorry, jesse..it'll get better eventually. I promise.

    5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by StandStill

    Roses grow redder: when I was a little kid we had roses in my backyard, one year it snowed before they all fell off. The colder it got the redder the roses were

    Her eyes violent blue: at first i was going to write violet blue, but i thought that the violent playful fierce nature of ur eyes.. it was more fitting

    As they tear apart the nothing
    That meant everything to you: i dont actually have a something, i dont actually have a concrete ambition or goal. im easily broken and easily hurt.

    All small talk aside
    I'm so sorry it hurts: I wanted to know what it was u were thinking, and what you felt, all i got was small things. not insignificant. small

    You're not acknowledging that
    I don't know what's worse: I tried to get you to talk about it and it didnt work and i felt replaced and useless and third wheel on a unicycle

    Then the colours shuffle: I had this toy and it separates the colours when it goes throught the parts, they all fall in different ways and i always tried to get them to fall in a rainbow but i dont think the toy could do that
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    Like they are breaking their dance
    But all of these patterns
    Where picked in advanced: i desperately wished i could make them do something they couldnt do, i tried. then i gave up. i think my mom sold the toy anyway

    These roses are red
    The sky violent blue
    The light caused light
    To reflect off of you: dream a long time ago about you and me at the dancehall

    The rain bounced off your cheeks
    The moon glowed in your eyes: that was part of the dream, the moon glowed in ur eyes, it always glowed in your eyes

    Now the colours are torn: i just had this image of all the colours melting away from my dream just like my toy did

    Speak no witness, bear no lies: if you don't tell anyone what u see u wont have any lies given back to you. its a pun on ask no questions hear no lies

    Then the colours shift
    Like they are breaking their dancers: almost repatition, but it says dancers, not dance. they arent breaking the pattern anymore, its breaking the dancer

    And you drew blue hearts on your hand
    Something about them made you feel better: you put a heart on your hand when you felt loved, i remember that because the first dream i ever had of you i kissed you where that heart was

    These roses are red
    My lips, cold and blue now: it was talking about how its getting colder where i am and my lips are turning blue

    Shivering in the snow: same as above

    But where are you now?: hows the weather in california, where are u now as in do u still love me, where are u now as in what are u doing, are u laughing, are u smiling, are u thinking about me, are they good thoughts... the list is ongoing

  • 8 years ago

    by Kimberley

    Roses grow redder
    Her eyes violent blue
    As they tear apart the nothing
    That meant everything to you

    I really loved this stanza. All of them were amazing but this is my Fav. The poem was beautiful. I'm so adding it to my favs. 5/5

    ~KM~