Comments : Soldier Vs. Self

  • 9 years ago

    by Courtney Hough

    Step one, making sure I breathe
    Vowing to myself I will never fall
    Remembering the world is counting on me
    Truth, faith and honor.... for these I stand tall

    is my fav good makes u think how ur life really is over there,and how good i have it for people like you.......stand tall and know people here like me are proud of u protecting our country...........5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very interesting write, in which I enjoyed reading. I like unique writes such as this one. Your flow was good but the structure I felt would've been better if broken into stanzas. Overall a well written piece of poetry, keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 9 years ago

    by Teria

    "Truth, faith and honor.... for these I stand tall"
    [Truth, faith, and honor ... for which I stand tall]
    - You need your commas. (: And, I think that replacing these with which kind of gives it a more poetic form. Just my opinion though.

    It's hard to relate to this poem with how you wrote it. The emotional boundries set on the other hand are so easily related to by me. You've made it your own poem, not just a poem for the readers. Which I adore a LOT. You're a good writer, a good poet. Keep it up. (: