Comments : Beautiful Mirage

  • 9 years ago

    by Faithless

    Wow this is absolutely beautiful.I love how you use the desert's mirage as a metaphor,
    comparing ur desires with it. At times we see things that we want to see though it seem so real but when you close to it, it's all in our imagination.Excellent job

  • 9 years ago

    by Cara

    This is such a beautiful poem. A really unique idea, writing about a mirage.. i dont think ive seen that one before so awesome work. I really liked the description you gave of the mirage.. if it werent for the title then i wouldnt have had any idea until the end that it wasnt real. I liked the title though, it really made me want to read it.
    The flow was really good also.
    Keep up the great work :]

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    A beautiful piece, I like your word choice and you had some good images in there. A very enjoyable read, nice work.

    "Silver clouds rain down forgotten tears
    Filling the Nile running through my veins"

    This was my favorite part.

  • 9 years ago

    by Shokry Al Qubati

    A wonderful dream! 5/5