Crash

I wish I could come along with you sweetheart...this sure sounds like something really good!
Great poem Krista, great wording, good portrayal of emotions:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

It feels like its missing something, but i like it. play around with it and see if it can be tweaked to make it even better ;-)

Its nice to find a short, direct poem every now and then.

I think that I like the simple-ness of this poem. Its not over the poem (like most of mine) but it doesn't lack anything either. It has a great choice of words and adjectives and the imagery was surprisingly well defined.

At first, I thought it was a haiku, but obviously it isn't. I think you could easily turn it into one if you wanted. It would help give it definition without affecting the subject.

I didn't vote on it because I didn't think it was quite up to a five, but it was still a good poem.

Keep writing.