Comments : To Sleep

  • 15 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Corinne,
    What an amazing piece of poetry. This is beautiful and remnant of the still I rise by maya angelou which is one of my favorite poems. I love how it is reminscent of the insomnia and thoughts that plague us in the evening. Great Job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Corinne
    What a piece I can relate to.....I hate the nights...everyone else asleep and sitting alone with just your thoughts.
    Great job!
    (((Hugs)))
    Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This one is chilling. Awesome..

    I long to drink from the river Lethe
    Forgetting all that's been said
    I should ignore it but instead

    I rise
    Like a thirsty vampire
    I rise
    Like the flames of a fire
    I rise
    Even though I tire from lack of
    Sleep

    This one is my fav. Very powerful indeed.

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by Sylvia

    You nailed insomnia. I use to be like this, could not sleep, prowled around, thinking about all the things going on, worrying about everything. I don't know what has changed but I sleep now most of the night. Good job. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I can definetly relate to a lack of sleep. i love your word choice in this piece. As always an enjoyable read. I especially loved these lines:

    Summoned in the middle of the night
    By the tormentors in my head
    I should ignore them but instead

    Sometimes we have bad dreams or worry and can not go to sleep. I like the reference to tormentors. It can be interpreted a few different ways.

    I rise
    Like a ghost on the prowl
    I rise
    Like a hunting owl
    I rise
    And run afoul of the law of
    Sleep

    Brilliant!

  • 15 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Great imagery and emotion...I've been an insomniac of sorts since I've been on nights...can so relate

    "I rise
    Like a thirsty vampire
    I rise
    Like the flames of a fire
    I rise
    Even though I tire from lack of
    Sleep "

    ^perfect description of a night shift worker...love the vampire insertion!

    Take care, Debbie

  • 15 years ago

    by Nee

    Oh my..
    I can't even express the love I feel for this poem..
    I really loved the idea..I didn't know there might be a poem that's talkin about this hehe..never imagined sleep might be a subject.
    I so loved the parts where you kept repeating I rise..they gave the poem so much strength.

    Write on :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Melissa

    I love how you've written this piece, Corinne! Unfortunately I relate all too well. At least we have our pens to keep us company, if not we'd be sleepy and alone. Very nice ending, too. I really liked the repeat of "I rise". Great write once again. ;o)