I find that most Japanese styles of poetry are difficult to master.

'Lumbering tree trunks
Hold masses of vivid greens
Providing natural shade'

From this we get a really big description, and from only a small amount of words, that's a great truimph. 'Lumbering' was a fantastic choice. You set the reader up for the contrast or contradiction in imagery in the second.

'Deforestation
Destroying vast areas
Of this stunning wonderland'

That one word sits on it's own, and it's powerful like that. I maybe would have liked it if you'd related or linked the last line to the first stanza/line so the reader can familiarise with the imagery, but that's just minor. This was an excellently penned Sedoka.

Well done :)

Dear Cara,

With this poem you not only show how talented you are (Japanese formats are very hard to master!) but you also show commitment to the world around you. Indeed the rate at which our 'lungs"are being destroyed should have our fullest attention. If trees were to dissapear completely, we would too because they provide our oxygen!

Bravo, Ozzie girl:) You are a true gem, in so many ways:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Well done a very nice poem with a strong message, global warming is a huge problem that few people ever think about
Well done

Grant

Lumbering tree trunks
Hold masses of vivid greens
Providing natural shade

With little words you have decribe nature's forest beautifully and how it is consired home and shelter for the creatures living in the forest

Deforestation
Destroying vast areas
Of this stunning wonderland

Here I can see the dissapearing act from luscious green forest to completely bold flatten land. It is sad that they are cutting down on the natural reserve and not planning to re-plant it back

Overall, you have worked really great on the imginery.Keep it up

Excellent Job
5/5

Well written in words of wisdom and intelligent information. You gave the reader all he needed to see the situation as you do , with a smooth easy flow.

Awesome! i love short poems! 5/5

I really like the style of this, the emotion felt and the title = WOW! 5/5, Em xx