Comments : Making Peace

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    And inside the honey jar
    Face deep in the dirt
    Hold onto what feeds the pain
    Then wonder why you hurt
    ^^^
    So true, we seem to hold tightly to the things that hurt us. Perhaps hoping it will change things or waiting to see change.

    A million choices in the world
    Could wash it all away
    But bitterness has taken you
    Where happy cannot stay
    ^^^
    It's that one choice that holds us down ... ties us to bitter.

    When all you see is what you've lost
    You lose all you could gain
    Life becomes an empty shell
    Pride becomes your chain
    ^^^
    This part speaks so much truth. When we keep looking back instead of forward ... dragging that big heavy suitcase with us.

    A wonderfully penned piece that makes the reader think.

    Excellent read Jenn !!!

  • 8 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    A profound message conveyed with perfection.
    I especially liked this stanza:

    "When all you see is what you've lost
    You lose all you could gain
    Life becomes an empty shell
    Pride becomes your chain"

    Wonderful ending as well. Keep it up!

  • 8 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats on your win Jenn !!!!! Very well deserved my friend ~hugs~

  • 8 years ago

    by Knee

    "Pride becomes your chain"
    Very great line, I sensed to much wisdom in it, my fave!
    Some of the rhyming words went a bit cliche, but other than that your poem is amazing and deserved the win :)
    And you know how much I love your wisdom in the poems =)

    Great write, great read.
    Write On !

  • 8 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    Omg. this is breath taking.
    i loved every stanza, especially the lines

    "When all you see is what you've lost
    You lose all you could gain"

    iv been feeling horrible lately and this read eased my by that little bit. thank you and well done for such a excellent piece
    5* fav*

  • 8 years ago

    by Randy East

    Wow, great poem

    almost as good as my poems J/k

    Actually we are simpular in our style of write.
    thats nice to see.

    5/5 for sure.