This is a good poem but

get rid of all the repetive lines
get rid of the slashes
where is says old so old delete that
delete some of the periods like them lines of them

but the structure is good so is the emotion there is no rythem really which would make it better and more smoother to read

well done

Wow i love this poem it is a good work i give it a 5/5 =)

But for now darkness and eternal blood filled bliss.
So i shall leave you my dear with this sample kiss.

that part is wicked it is so cool i love it 5/5