Comments : How The Dark Thinks~(BLOOD)

  • 8 years ago

    by Black fox

    This is a good poem but

    get rid of all the repetive lines
    get rid of the slashes
    where is says old so old delete that
    delete some of the periods like them lines of them

    but the structure is good so is the emotion there is no rythem really which would make it better and more smoother to read

    well done

  • 8 years ago

    by Jasmine

    Wow i love this poem it is a good work i give it a 5/5 =)

  • 8 years ago

    by Courtney Hough

    But for now darkness and eternal blood filled bliss.
    So i shall leave you my dear with this sample kiss.

    that part is wicked it is so cool i love it 5/5