"frolicking in the garden
hair blowing in the breeze
bare feet, torn jeans
a musical treat flutters within the trees"
`Impressively written, you have some awesome word choice here in which really helped out with painting a vivid image for the reader. This was absolutely well written, "a musical treat flutters within the trees" - That's something so unique, I've never heard this before..
"picking daisies along the way
weaves a halo of delight
places it upon her head
giggles float among fluffy clouds
as she dances like a princess
in daisies and blue jeans"
`Perfectly written! A beautiful image, someone running through the fields picking daisies.
Ohhh, that's nice. Reminds me of the days I used to make daisy chains and run around the garden.
I like this piece because it has an optimistic attitude, the torn jeans on the girl makes it look like she's troubled, yet her dreams keep her going with hope to someday be a princess like in the fairytales.
great write... keep it up!
I have a niece named Daisy and she's such a little angel...I could see her running in the garden when I read this...is that silly? I mean I know we all come to our conclusions and see our own visions but how am I going to place my own little girl in your poem? HAHA Seriously, I think it's truly special when you have the power to that to a reader...this piece is special Angie! I came back because I was so into it at lunch today I wanted to read more!! :) This may be my favorite yet....I don't see her much so it was nice to be reminded of your beautiful spirit. :):):)