Comments : Downtown, Toronto

  • 8 years ago

    by Corinne

    Melissa! Your writing just keeps getting better and better - I didn't think it was possible! This is WONDERFUL. I love "guilt splashed over me like holy water"

  • 8 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Indeed what a witty line.

    "a sense of guilt splashed over me,
    like holy water"

    You have a way of captivating the reader and lately you been doing that and adding a certain magic within your lines. Way to go! I am thoroughly enjoying the reads.

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I really like this write Melissa, it was enjoyable from the start and I appreciate the subject as well. I think you have done a great job of taking this personal experience and turning it into a creative write.

    "a sense of guilt splashed over me,
    like holy water"

    I thought this was a great comparison, other than that I can't pick my favorite part because the whole thing was wonderful.]

    Great job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Curing the Comon Cliche

    I love toronto. You know what I saw there last week that I haven't seen since I was 7. A squeegy kid. The homeless kids that run up to ur car and was it at a red light. I liked the poem. Very detailed.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mike

    I live in toronto its not a very good place the homeless there are not very nice sounds like you enocuntered a nicer one good poem.