Comments : Milk

  • 8 years ago

    by Sheep

    Wow.
    That has to be one of the most random poems I have ever read, yet it's also one of the best. I love how it sounds like someones thoughts, how when someone mentions one thing, your mind jumps to the next. I love how you spell out sax and ivory, it really makes the poem flow.
    Anyways, their are a few things I'd suggest. In the first line, the only words that should be capitalized are cold and Christmas.

    "Bad Grammar is being taught, Americas Corrupt!"

    It should be "America's"

    In the line "Horny Politicians", politicians shouldn't be capitalized.

    Those are the only things I can find, but really, an incredible poem.

  • 7 years ago

    by BrokenAngel FallenFiend

    Thats amazeing. Its so random yet so completly perfect. It honestly sounds liek it was taken out of my head, or the likes of it. Honestly keep writing your very good.

  • 7 years ago

    by Ashley

    Haha that was brilliant like you can think up to so many thoughts in a day