Comments : Betrayal in Conceit

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Woah! What a poem!

    Was I ever surprised when I opened up the page.....
    You have a way with words, what a talent!

    Feet numb with exhaustion, bleeding with fear;
    Death cackling in torment upon my ear.
    Prey to the wicked; my fallen allies,
    "I've had ENOUGH!" My sanity cries.

    ^^

    I found this to be ths strongest stanza, I so love your wording....

    Keep writing!

    WV 5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Excellent intense poem. Wording is original and powerful. Very impressive