Comments : Lost and hidden in a shadow (drowned in tear's)

  • 8 years ago

    by divine divinity

    For the first part its really great, but does need a few more verses, I thought it was beautifully written, expressive of desire, love and pain, and tells the beginning part of an interesting story and relationship.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    I like the start of this poem, it had lots of potential.
    I liked the 'ending' ....
    "I'd die a thousand death's
    To spare you an ounce of pain
    Or a chance to return
    Where the old you still remains" shows alot of emotion and how you truly feel, 5/5. Em x