Comments : Transition in Will

  • 8 years ago

    by oldthings

    I'm starting to think your amazing, your use of language is fantastic, and the flow is beautiful, i reread it at least four times, esspecialy the first two stanzas.

    and i LOVE these lines.

    I'm envious of your writing. beautiful. 5/5
    =)

    When life has always moved so fast,
    it's weird to try and make it last
    by taking out what makes it gone,
    though to this corruption I am drawn.

    its so true, and so beautiful how you phrased it