I like how you have the "by sadness and depression" at the end of the first stanza. Sounds really good. I will think and pm you if I can come up with anything

I think it stands alone great just like it is. If someone else were to add to it then I believe that it would take away from the impact and flow you have in the poem itself. There are a few grammar mistakes but they are no big deal in the message. I think it is up to the write to convey their own message in their own way. Great Job,
Kay

I wouldn't change anything about this. It's pure emotions and that's what matters. I really enjoyed this piece. Keep it up hun. Nik

I agree with Dixiedaisy and Lady Nik, it's beautiful as it is. Veyr powerful, 5/5. Em

Please continue writing!!! I enjoyed reading it!!! You have the talent...Preserve it!!!

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