Comments : The Man and the Boy on the Moon

  • 8 years ago

    by WakingFreedom

    'Midnight lights and blueberry skies
    match the smile on your face
    and the twinkle in your eyes.
    Forever we sit there, thinking out loud;
    between the neon stars
    and the golden clouds.'

    This is such an amazing stanza, oh wow. Beautifully written. I loved the imagery this has produced. Flowing is off the chart amazing.
    Stanza two, last line is so true. A father's pride is an amazing thing to have. Beautifully worded.
    You are talented, thank you for sharing. I loved the way you mentioned of the Father's hands, it's just so captivating. So pure.
    Thank you.
    -Waking Freedom 5/5