Comments : Broken Boys and Broken Girls

  • 8 years ago

    by Faithless

    This is something interesting. I like how you compose this poem especially the 2nd stanza on how you wish you could take back all your wishes(This how i interpret it). I actually had a mental motion picture in mind when i read the lines in the 3rd stanza, where a there's a person putting a flower on a grave except it's all in a reverse chronological order. It's also interesting how you reused the 1st stanza as your last stanza.It really does work for me. I think you've done a great job writing this poem. Keep pouring your brilliant ideas out;)

  • 8 years ago

    by Corruption

    This is a freaking good poem :D
    maybe i havent read your stuff lately
    but this seemed much different then anything
    i read by you before, this seemed i dont know
    more abrupt i guess :P
    not in a bad way dw
    very nice short poem i love it
    keep em comin :D


  • 8 years ago

    by iFallToPieces

    Woah i loved this poem, especially the repetition of the verse;
    All around the freaking world:
    Broken boys and broken girls.
    Cut the wires to my brain,
    remembering the dreams I've slain.

    having it at the start and the end tied the poem together, loved the flow and rhyme scheme. 5/5

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