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by Robie Lincer
Amazing write...short but straight to the point,,,and the Rhyming was very good, i loved the structure
by Kitty Kurse
"Have you ever been with someone,
and wished it'd never end.
Stayed up tell(till) 7am one night,
or shared a perfect weekend."
Good opening and yes yes I have:)
"Where moments that you spent alone,
completed you within,
and every time you recollect
you're left sitting with a grin. "
I totally know this feeling.
"I have..., and it was priceless!!
Nothing else I'd rather do,
And I can say that when I did...
These moments were with you."
You seem to always know how to end your poems perfectly! I can relate to this poem as well. 5/5 and congrats you made it to my favorite author list:D
OH my gosh. You just brought back a rush of memories for me with this poem, brought me to tears thinking of them. Thank you honestly. <3
The only thing I didn't like here was the punctuation.
'Have you ever been with someone,
and wished it'd never end.'
A question mark would help with heightening the importance of the question.
'I have..., and it was priceless!!'
Remove the comma. I think one exclamation point would do in poetry.
The rhymes gave this a nice happy tone. I like it. The message was also really sweet. Keep writing :)