I'm sure this was the one you wanted me to read.
And its a great piece, but it does, indeed, have the potential to be more,
Now, I mean no disrespect, this is just a little creative criticism,
Take out the line 'there togetherness' it'll make it flow better, and change distant to distanced
And that's it, other than those tiny mishaps, you've put together a great piece,
But a word of advice from someone who knows, don't distance yourself from people for a long time, it gets really lonely, ..but now I'm starting to sound sappy... and I hate that.. so, good job, keep pushing yourself, try thinking out side of the box and beyond, twist your thoughts a little, don't forget to laugh at yourself when you screw up, annnd yea... i think my job here is done xD 5/5
This is beautifully written Cy. Even though I feel comfort in sharing something with you and connecting with you not just through writing but emotions too, it saddens me to feel the hurt in it too. Personally, for me, it's been an honor, and I pray things get better for you cy.
Liked this. This is how I felt when I was on drugs like I was saying in that message. Everytime I did that no one wanted to be around me. I lost close friends over it and did stuff I regret. So I know what you mean when you said reading that girls poem opened your eyes. This one did to. Amazing write. It actually inspired me to write again. But anyways, keep it up.(: 5.5
Very nice. an i dig what you said on your wall page thingy. its true that drugs an alcohol do all that shitty stuff to ppl. ive been through that too, i'm just glad i realized what it does and what a waste of time it is; im sober too. and i'm friggen loving it more than ever.
Dude! thats so flippin crazy. i feel just like that right now. like every word. my lil bro adopted parents are trying to make me go to therapy and shit over it. i probably need it but. there went alot of personal info to the hole world. cool. F...k.. it.