Comments : It's not me It's You

  • 6 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Such a shame, fathers not being there for their children. There are tons of poems on this site about this same exact problem, Ive written a few myself. :(

    It's ok daddy I know I'm not your kid,
    Your kid is the bottle of jack.

    ^ Id just say watch your syllable count here, it kind of threw off the flow a bit. and the repition of your kid should be changed.

    Other than that good work :) You remind me of myself when I used to write rhyming poetry