Comments : Who knew...

  • 6 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Aw, i know how this is.
    Loved it.

    Holding hands, you would whisper
    "Baby, I'm still not close enough"
    You held onto my arm so close
    Whispering, "You're mine, hot stuff"
    -so cute(:

    It flowed perfectly, the emotion poured out. How close yall were & never expecting it to turn out like this.
    Great Job (:
    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is awesome. I agree with the above about that specific stanza being cute, and about the flow. The story was nice and most people can relate to it. Excellent piece, amazing job