Comments : This day has finally come... (Revised)

  • 6 years ago

    by Meme

    @_@ OMMMMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGG !!!
    I pictured the whole thing infront of me !!!
    And it just killed me, its like stabbing someone straight in their heart. It fekt real, so real, and the ending was just so, AAAAAAAHHHHH :(

    Greatly amazingly written piece ..
    5/5 and a sad face ..

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    You have penned a magnificent piece. It is filled with emotion, but the tone changes so quickly at the end. The word choice is simple as is the flow, but both are terrific. Outstanding job, yet again.

  • 6 years ago

    by aanika R I P

    JEEEESUS! :( i'm sorry if its your genuine story
    but anyways superbly written i loved the way you've described the whole scene....:)

  • 6 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Wow.
    i LOVE this poem.

    Such heartbreaking at the end. Wanting to spend your life with her & getting the worst phonecall. Emotion spills out of this, it flowed so perfectly.
    Love it
    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow!!! I knew a bad ending was coming but it was just so heartbreaking and sad.... But I loved how you told this story... and described every sweet moment, getting everything ready, it was just so romantic and sweet! And the ending was just terrible, as in what the girl said! Made me so upset!!! (I hope this didn't actually happen!!!) Great poem though my friend! 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by kiara

    I totally wasn't expecting that ending!!! i was reading the whole thing smiling at how cute everything was and how lucky that girl must be and then it ends so sadly :( i'm sorry if this is really true but the poem was awesome i loved it!!!

    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    Wow, That was so sad at the end :( that was soo unexpected and it ended horribly..

  • 6 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Wow, u r such an amazing writer..d more i am readin ur poetry ,d more i am becomin a fan of urs..excellent piece of work..5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Sadespair

    That's a bummer -_-
    But made a great poem! Seriously well written. The ending couldn't be more perfect. Great job!

  • 6 years ago

    by Half Husband Half father

    It is amazing but the heart breaking part is so fast u shud make it little large i mean u ended d poem a little bit early...

  • 6 years ago

    by TheVampire

    Aw Ouch!
    I lost the feeling though towards the end. still very emotional

  • 4 years ago

    by LoVerSLaND

    Nicely written 4/5