MaryAnne... Amazing as always. I have missed the darkness and the shivers you give the reader when you dress your words with a black veil. So one can only say: Damn it, you're really got a hold on me, by your words.

mmm.. what enticed me the most was the atmosphere, emphasized by detailed descriptions which thickens the volume and depth:

meteorite
cascading
mechanical
crevices

^ I think alongside these also, that the motion is very clear and which turns those emotions into reality.

And it's always in the twist in the end that you create.

It always appears that it's an open-end.

Amazing, as always :)

This is a excellent piece. it's dark and chilling and full of exciting imagery. It is like a mystery that captivates the reader. Good poem.

My gosh this poem is good. It sets an awesome tone from the very start and it is intriguing but never lets go of the interest. You have a wonderful talent because there is so much shown in this piece alone. Imagery that has been used here is absolutely stunning as is the word choice. For sure I have to give this a 5/5