Comments : The follower

  • 12 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    Really short, but I love the message and flow!
    So simple, and yet it has such a strong message. I'd consider changing one thing, however. And that's the "the" in the first line, if you remove it you'll have the same flow, and you'll have it grammatically correct as well. Since now it'll pretty much require a "the" before darkness as well, and with that you'll ruin some of the flow.

    Great job, keep it up!

  • 12 years ago

    by Erion

    Thank you for your comment and voting! if you have any other suggestions, i'd love to hear them!