Hey cupcake,

Loved the poem, but one part messed with your beautiful flow.. The "but my heart was a joyful numb." It'd sound better if you write "but my heart was joyfully numb." It just.. Keeps up with your creatively beautiful flow.

5/5

- Shining Star

Awesome title :) amazing piece. The word choice is great and the emotion is wonderful. It really is excellent.

You can feel the great overwhelming joy in this amazing poem of urs wonderful write fantastic job 5/5