I can totally relate this is a very hard thing to deal with when someone you love uses cigarettes or street drug to cope. The end is always the same painful for them and those who care about them. Great expressions
I love how you've made it your mission to help this person and to care about their life even when they dont and they push you away themselves for trying.
You have expressed yourself perfectly and hopefully one day (soon) they'll finally listen and realise that you were right all along.
Great to see you standing up for something you believe so strongly about.
4 years ago
by Sidh Swabhav
Reading your poems is like watching a movie of your life.
4 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
Kaitlyn- I really like this because a lot of people can relate to it. I think though my one nitpick always is the length. You always seem to ramble on in all of your poems and I think you can get to the point sooner. I don't hate it but I think that's something you can work on. But for the poem it self. I like it because a lot of people go through this. This person is/was very close to you. The imagery in the piece is very lovely. The character has so much hope and I love it. I think whenever a you in general get close to a person you want to help them with everything. So the love shines through here. There are two different view points at times here. The character who I assume is you and thesmoker. It seems like you made the ppersons only happiness in smoking and addiction is very hard to break. Overall there is love and hope through out and I loved that. The only thing I didn't love was the title. It doesn't really have a lot to do with the poem imo. But otherwise. Great.