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  • 6 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This was a really good idea most people dont realise how many are willing to take there own life

    Someone has to help them get through,
    and to help them.

    The line above you used help them twice

    you could of said ...
    someone has to help them get through,
    There pain and suffering


    you could write it diffrently like ...

    The pain is taking control
    someone needs to help before

    Its too late

    Keep writing :-)