Puppet Masters

This was great! Very inspiring!! It sucks being controlled by a group we can't control, but its eveyday life and I think because people don't rise up and speak up maybe certain places are in the states their in because of it.

Your writing is awesome, bold! Your tone was so strict and serious that I think it'd shake anyone awake and make people want to rise up!

This is a good poem and deservedly so as you have left your comfort zone of love eventually love poems are only repeating the same message with different words and become bland keep experimenting and learning from your mistakes. this puppet masters is very good because you took a chance on a different poem and topic. it worked keep up the good work

Very easy subject to write about and i think your ideas have been obvious and simple for an intricate situation. your poem is also to wordy and cold with no feeling and emotion for this contagion. i also have wrote a poem on this subject and i think you should read it as i am also irish and european secondly.try to add a touch of cynisism and real gusto to your poems

I really like the tone and the message here.
We are all basically a slave to our economic system and the thieves who control it.

As for critique, I think you should start right in with "An insidious plot..."
And, to be honest, I think there is a lot of "fluff," i.e., redundant or unnecessary information. By shortening this, I think it can be a much more powerful write.

Here are my suggestions:

An insidious plot,
an ingenious design,
slavery through debt,
deceit,
corruption,
manipulation.

There is no Left,
no Right,
only ignorance,
as they pull the strings
from behind
their gilded curtain.

So, rise up!
Reclaim your freedom!
Rise up!
Or you will be no more!

Ole

Thats so true my friend. Great message!