Interesting form.......you managed it well.I need to read it again.

I thought this was a great and mysterious poem. I absolutely love ships so this caught my attention. The describing the emotion felt here was bone chilling yet nice at the same time. Nice Write. :)

Kay*

I know I've told you about my thoughts on this poem a while back when originally written, but this is absolutely fantastic! I love this form and think anything with repetition is generally insanely difficult in nature. You have taken a prompt about a dog and made it into this beautifully crafted masterpiece!

I love how you made the theme of this poem a marooned ship and really played on that - how easily it could be tied into the astrological side with the full moon and changing of the tides, etc.

"Mercury was somehow spotted in slumber"

this was my favorite line, and one I keep reading over and over, it replays itself in my head. This one stuck out the most and I'm not sure why. Spotted in slumber, as though it's taboo or even secret... beautifully written!

Kay
This form seems so difficult. Yet you did it with ease. The piece is excellent. Love the concept of the marooned dog and the planets.
Great job!
Love Cindy