This was filled with passion, Deana and with yearning for what once was. I like how you made each stanza stand on its own and highlighting another part of the memories. If only we knew how precious moments really are when we are making the memories...but often we realize the dept of love shared only in hindsight.
Beautiful poem with words that make you think about your own life and how you use your time.
I loved your opening stanza...a pretty exquisite vision was planted in my mind when I read it!
What this reminds me of is the innocence of a first love...the memories always stay vivid in your mind...and like you said 'for a moment" those memories mean the world to you when they're happening....
I think" for a moment" is a great line, like I said I was thinking about my first love, which I don't like to do, but it brings back a feeling you only got in the few seconds those memories were present.
Stars lit the universe...
Like a thousand diamonds,
Scattered on the floor of heaven"
This is an amazing piece of poetry! Every line screams as though it's jumping out of the page, the metaphors you use are beyond brilliant, this is outstanding.
"You held me...and for a moment,
I was swept away,
with the summer breeze"
Isn't it amazing the impact another person can have on our lives, it brings a calmness that nothing else no matter how far you search, can imitate, love is unique, so is the power it gives our feelings.
"Your eyes whispered words of love,
That came from the soul...
The silence was filled with yearning"
When you have a connection stronger than words, sometimes a single look will tell you everything you wish to know. The eyes of a lover are the gateway to truth about each other.
Overall this is a sweet sentiment of love. It's nice to see some people believe in it still, well written.
5 years ago
by average thoughts
I enjoyed evry moment reading this poem of uors..
5 years ago
This was really beautiful. Such fantastic imagery and emotion that could move a mountain! I think most of us can relate to a person in our lives like this- I hope it wins :) Simply awesome!