To Exist

What a heartbreakingly beautiful poem! I loved how the first sentence set the scene and I imagined myself there as well. The first stanza reminded me of the Lion King where Mufasa tells Simba that all those that die become stars and watch those that are living...Such a sad scene to paint.

"Now that your heartbeat is
quiet, do those secrets
still linger like your essence?"
^I am blown away. Such a poetic way of expressing death and questioning if the spirit remains.

"if only the moon could
capture the sadness of
solitude"
^Blown away once more...The lost love is now a star and you feel so alone without them that you wish the moon to capture that emotion and allow to linger among the one you love. Maybe my interpretation isn't quite what you had in mind but I love that this line set that image in my mind.

I loved how you let the last line stand on its own because it holds such a deep message. Wonderfully written.

Amazing poem! Great flow...5/5!

Gr8 poem as always i enjoyed reading it ttyl.:)

If only the moon could
capture the sadness of
solitude--
then maybe we'd be one.

omg i loved this stanza! i can relate a lot. i have often thought the exact same thought. only you worded it just right. :)

it might be that i am listening to Tycho while i read, but everything was great. it was almost like a dream state.

There is a sense of a deep sadness weaved with this love that wants so much to have and feel love once again. The yearning and the pain is felt within each stanza and the last stanza is especially very touching...take care.