Amazing piece. So uplifting and inspirational. The rhymes flowed rather well, and doesn't seem too forced. I love the simple imagery and word choice. Just some minor errors I spotted:
"Smiles upon our faces
Feeling God's embraces"--embrace is a mass noun, therefore, change embraces (which is a verb) to embrace.
"You are so strong
Satin is so wrong"--satin is a type of cloth, should be 'Satan'
Overall, a very beautiful piece. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it :)