Comments : Innocent Smiles

  • 5 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    This is a wonderful, wonderful poem that is written by a very caring, thoughtful and loving person.
    Your poem is beautiful Little Mermaid, and your command of English is very good indeed!
    I am so pleased that you continued your writing, your piece here does you much credit.
    This is a beautiful poem. God bless you always.

  • 5 years ago

    by average thoughts

    This poem is a grt piece for al those innocent kids

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I feel like writing rhymed poetry again haha. The message is just beautiful.
    A little editing would polish this piece:

    "But still bear beautiful smile and sparkle on their eyes"
    on--in
    smile--smiles

    "They are bound up in this very small world"
    Up--to. Eradicate 'in'

    Other than that, this is beauty in its rawest and purest form. Keep writing!
    -X

  • 5 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    I am speechless with this poem. All that I can say is Wow! I love it girl...I like the way you write how the child is innocent. Really wonderful piece.
    5/5
    ~C

  • 5 years ago

    by TJ Standen

    Wow, this is very touching and a great piece of poetry. It is so beautiful and it brought tears to my eyes. Well done

    • 5 years ago

      by LittleMermaid

      Thank u for the comment...m happy that u liked my poem..i tried my best to jot down what i saw n felt that time.it was so hard for me to control my tears when i saw those children n their pitiful condition.

  • 5 years ago

    by Amreen

    Beautiful poem LM... You don't know dear how much your words speak their pain... it is sorrowful to hear this n I hope they will have something much better in life...:)