Comments : Metamorphosis

  • WOW!! I had to add this to my favourites!

    Verse 1:
    You seem to be talking about photos... Memories of someone who felt beautiful.. Exotic

    Verse 2:
    Seem to have broken something... A mirror perhaps... Life... Love?... Has taken an unexpected turn for the worst. You dont want to believe it to be true but must.. You must move on.. To let it be in the past... A memory

    Verse 3:
    You seem to be feeling like you are a fake... Like you're hiding your real self behind a mask.. Concealing who you really are, who you want to be, who you could be... You dont like the way you appear in the mirror, but you know you have a lot of worth, a lot to give because you are beautiful person on the inside... If only you were able to let it shine through...

    Verse 4:
    You feel incapable of being loved because you dont love yourself enough inside and out... You feel like you have to change yourself to please... Perhaps in relation to verse 1 where you're talking about photos... Photos of others, celebrities to imitate?.. Or past images of yourself as you constantly change.. Becoming unrecognisable to who you really are..?

    There are so many interpretations with each verse, so much depth in so few lines... This is truly a masterpiece.
    5/5

  • WOW!! I had to add this to my favourites!

    Verse 1:
    You seem to be talking about photos... Memories of someone who felt beautiful.. Exotic

    Verse 2:
    Seem to have broken something... A mirror perhaps... Life... Love?... Has taken an unexpected turn for the worst. You dont want to believe it to be true but must.. You must move on.. To let it be in the past... A memory

    Verse 3:
    You seem to be feeling like you are a fake... Like you're hiding your real self behind a mask.. Concealing who you really are, who you want to be, who you could be... You dont like the way you appear in the mirror, but you know you have a lot of worth, a lot to give because you are beautiful person on the inside... If only you were able to let it shine through...

    Verse 4:
    You feel incapable of being loved because you dont love yourself enough inside and out... You feel like you have to change yourself to please... Perhaps in relation to verse 1 where you're talking about photos... Photos of others, celebrities to imitate?.. Or past images of yourself as you constantly change.. Becoming unrecognisable to who you really are..?

    There are so many interpretations with each verse, so much depth in so few lines... This is truly a masterpiece.
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I see life through a lens
    captured with just one click
    it's like a camera taking its time to get
    the ancle and focus, and all it takes is
    one quick click to have that moment captured
    Trapped in the past and stuck on repeat
    will I be ever able to press delete
    sometimes we tend to get stuck in the past
    repeating the same mistakes again
    not willing to let go of what is not anymore

    We all have endures rejection at some
    point in life, it does not feel good
    the feeling of trying to feel normal again

    Awesome Hannah 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    I agree with Dagmar, trying to feel normal again is bad feeling:)
    Good job Hannah:)

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    There will be some point in life where you will dig deep within you sould and find beauty. beauty is in all of us and I don't think the word beauty needs to just define our looks...I don't think you need to morph into anything, you are beautiful :)

    I loved this poem! being stuck in the past hit me hard because I've been there, but the moment you can break free from that is an awesome feeling!

  • 5 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This was alot deeper then the words showcased
    Astounding

    I really enjoyed this piece

  • 5 years ago

    by Thomas

    Sometimes we look for ourselves but we can't find anything. But as long as you remember who you are and where you come from everything will be ok.

    Very well written.

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    Thats how i feel, afraid to show who i am and always in the past

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Hannah :)
    Having read your profile, I know you are passionate about photography. The first verses really showcases your passion for it. The way you wrote about seeing life through the lens was breathtaking.

    I liked the assonance of 'shattered' and 'scattered', as well as the subtle rhyme of 'repeat' and 'delete' (whether intended or not), but these lines seemed too ordinary for the context of this poem:
    'Shattered glass scattered across the marble
    floor,
    I need to pick up my fragile pieces,
    take my own advice and just move on.'
    ^ I don't really know, but this is the weakest part of the poem. First lines were depicting an overused image; following lines were just too telling. Expanding on 'my own advice' would be better in my opinion, and how would you 'move on'? Simply stating that the persona would 'just move on' is overused in poetry, unfortunately. You can 'show' how you'd move on perhaps..?

    'I try to showcase the beauty within,
    yet my insecurities draws me back in.'
    ^ A tiny grammatical error: draws should be 'draw'. If the subject is plural, the verb must be singular, and vice versa (:

    'I will undergo metamorphosis each day,
    just so I can feel normal again.'
    ^ You do succeed with the end. It is a very powerful ending. I like it.

    Keep writing!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    Such a sad piece my heart goes out to you and I hope in time you feel better it was an emotional poem that made a heartfelt read 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Hannah- You have created a poem that really stuck deep within me... I too feel like this and its really a powerful piece.... very nice!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Omar

    Wow i think Everone can relate to this poem. Great job.
    I think this is your best poem, yet. Keep it up :)