Comments : The Truth

  • 6 years ago

    by Darren

    Hi, good concept, I always like poems that read as the spoken rather than the written word.
    I have taken the liberty to edit it for you, a few spelling mistakes and punctuaton

    Ya need to listen to the words here that I'm saying,
    There's people dying on these streets and they need saving,
    Now I aint talking about the physical nature of things,
    People dying in a Game of Death, need G.O.D.

    People dying , baby's crying and no one trying,
    Living in a life of deceit, man it's nothing but lying,
    Just keep pushing, because you're never alone,
    One day Jesus is coming back to take us all home.

    Never-mind all the other things that you heard,
    Just grab a bible and open it up, cause that's Jesus word,
    And when things get hard, and you want to give up,
    Just remember Jesus died so that he could forgive us.

    Went down the wrong path, now I'm on the right road,
    Following my heart, cause its embedded in my soul,
    Keep your head up and remember it's not always as it seems,
    Like MLK said; "Man I had a dream..."

    I like the line keep your head up...


  • 6 years ago

    by Justin

    Thank you very much!

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Though I am not a religious person in this sense, I think that the actual point of the poem and the message is expressed well. I think that the word choice was nice, because it showed your voice well and made the poem relateable and realistic to the majority of the audience that has and will read this. I enjoyed the fact you really seemed to consider your audience, yet you made a point. I also like the fact that it wasn't all that long but it was saying a lot.



  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    So, i totally just rapped that haha. christian rap? very nice. i love the message!! and the title fits very well... it most definitely is the truth! i love the ending too with MLK quote...unique. overall, really loved it! i know this is a sucky comment, im on my phone lol i will come back soon and edit!