Wow i got chills while reading this. It is such an amazing poem! You done an awesome job and there seemed too be so much emotion! I loved it

THIS POEM IS SO DEEP AND SO REAL AND SO GOOD I REALLY ENJOYED READING YOUR PIECE KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK :)

Hi, I liked this and thought you expressed your feelings well through out.

The first thing that stands out to me though is that it is such an emotional piece of writing - however in my opinion I feel the choice of word " shit " degrades the poem of what it is worth. I think the poem would be better if you reworded both uses of this word. An example might be :
The first use:

Because you frown upon that shit

- Because you frown upon that view
- Because you frown upon that situation
- or just simply Because I know you frown upon that.

The second use :
Not the fake piece of shit

- Not the fake part of myself?
- Not the fake part of me?

This is just my opinion, I just think your poem is actually very good and worth more than the degradation of that word choice in this instant.

Who is always taking a razor

To the skin you helped create.

- these lines were really powerful and I think if a mother was to read those words it would reach her deep inside.

If you'd just look my in the eyes,

You would see the real me.

- I liked these lines because what I got from them was the feeling of the girl wanting her mum to notice. almost like a cry out for her to see. There is an error in this line : it should read " If you'd just look ME in the eyes"

As for your ending

"But the scared little girl inside

Who just wants it all to end"

What a very powerful way to end, it really shows the desperation and the pain she is feeling. It reaches out to the reader very strongly. You create emptathy for the character.

Well done on this.