Comments : A Loose Thread

  • 5 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Wow wow wow, and OMG:)
    I dont even know what to say this piece is just perfect, I really dunno what to say.
    I think this fits the sad category as well.
    You're sooooooooooooooooo talented Xanthe, I hope you won^_^

  • 5 years ago

    by Max

    What's with you and winter? =P
    btw it is a part that I adore in your poetry
    connecting it to winter
    winter is a sign of beauty but also loneliness and sadness
    anyway
    I think you had a smart word choice for the title
    it is so eye catchy
    I think this poem can be about somebody dear to you that you lost can be somebody you love or some very near friend to you or maybe somebody from your family
    by lost I mean that he\she changed the way they used to treat you that you felt like you aren't good enough for them anymore so they dropped you behind looking for another creation of theirs and
    "You just vanished the day your wheel broke.
    Perhaps I was too grey or maybe,
    I turned out too cold to suit your tastes.
    Too cold even to find a place in
    Winter... Abandoned. Yes, abandoned."

    this part was so good it is just telling me maybe you used winter as home cause I think you like winter a lot so you can't find a place in your own home cause that person made you feel Abandoned

    I think I am off the right way with my interpretation but what I can say I gave it a try right? =P

    over all this is just an amazing poem and I just love it haha

    Keep it up =)

    • 5 years ago

      by Xanthe

      Thank you, both. I changed the category.
      And I like your interpretation, Max. But the title ws suggested by Senyru, lol.

  • 5 years ago

    by Thomas

    Very good use of metaphors, I love it!

    Just remember that you are much more than a thread and you can spin your own life ;)

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Opening stanza....phenominal! Seriously xanthe, you took this challenge and nailed it. I love how you said you "feel like a blank verse". What a statement! I loved it! So often people use poetry terms but never had I read it used the way you had it.

    Loved the single lines between the stanzas, I felt your quick little statements gave power to your voice and helped prove your point.

    Also, I think you did incredible incorporating the wheel idea into this poem. I loved how you used it and the tone it gave to this piece. Well done!

  • 5 years ago

    by Jenni

    I just love this poem, every bit of it and I wish I had written it lol!
    I know that I'll not leave a proper comment, but I wanted to actually leave something, so that you know that this poem got to me and I have to admit, that I just realized its beauty now that I see it submitted. Did not notice it was in the challenge or maybe I missed it?

    Anyways, I have been reading this poem aloud because I feel that then it gets even better! :) You would probably read it best nonetheless. x)

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    You rocked this one. I love the idea
    feeling like a spinning wheel. Actually
    that was life is all about, spinning around.
    You have chosen the winter season.
    When things rather calm down with less
    activity due to the coldness. It can make
    you feel sluggish and sad, longing for the
    warmth.
    awesome

  • 5 years ago

    by Meme

    You are a true metaphor genius girl!!

    You nailed the images on this piece. Those one line sentences between verses are spot on. They added so much depth to the piece.

    So creative hon, your writings never fail to WOW me everytime.