You've done a fine job showing exactly how it feels like to be yearning for someone you love
The pain sometimes become unbearable
But poetry Seems to be a good cure for it

WOW! The depth of emotion in this piece was just astounding. I felt like I was the one having my heart basically ripped out whilst I was reading it.

I like how you used 'my organ' instead of heart - it gives the piece a personal, unique touch. Also, how you wrote the first and last stanzas almost as a mirror image of each other - that was clever.

Well penned. 5/5