Comments : First cancellation

  • 5 years ago

    by Formidable Muse

    "The solid ground has be shaken,
    I am sinking into the abyss."

    "My winter started when you broke a promise,
    That was the day hell froze to ice and the angels fall."

    ^^ Those two sections are my favorite, I felt a lot of power in them while I was reading.

    I liked how the beginning of each stanza showed love and that you cared in a way and the bottom half of each one showed sadness/pain. I think that was very clever.

  • 5 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I don't even know where to begin.
    This write here is way different from the ones you have written in the past. I feel
    the sadness, a broken promise, perhaps broken heart. All these factors can turn our feelings in to ice
    Excellent write Ole
    Add to my fav