Comments : Expressing Love

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    My heart skips a beat,
    when you approach my soul,
    your breath lifts my chin,
    and you kiss me to the core.

    Wow - great opening to a love poem. heart skipping a beat straight away implys how special this person is and how they make you feel. They appraoch your soul, meaning they know the real you, they see what is inside of you and they love it for what it is. I can see you lifting your head without him even touching you, like he does it through his thoughts, this is very powerful.

    Your spirit gives me hope
    to a future so bright.
    I'll let your eyes lead the way,
    and embellish it with their light.

    - it is so nice to have this feeling, you have described it well, how you take a chance with one person and trust in them to lead you to a bright future and to never cause you harm or darkness. You are putting your heart in his hand, that is beautiful.

    There are no words to describe
    your sweet, beautiful soul
    your innocence, your charm,
    your kindness and all.

    - you are giving us a glimpse of the other character, what about them that attracts you to them. You are describing the charming prince that perhaps you had always dreamt of.

    I am lucky to have met you,
    and forever I will be,
    for you're great and you're beyond
    what my eyes can normally see

    - good strong ending to sum up the poem, about how you feel about them and the love that surrounds you both. Your eyes are finally seeing something they wre trying so hard to find.

    Well done, good job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I don't ususally read rhyming pieces, I usually stop half way through, but this made me smiled and I loved the adorable lovey dovey ring to it!!

    Sooo cute girl :) Happy for you!

  • 11 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This is so sweet,

    Beautifully written

  • 11 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This is so sweet,

    Beautifully written

  • 11 years ago

    by Owner of an Untamed Heart

    It was so sweet and bubbly; yet, it lifted me in a way where I felt as though this love can become more fervor and realistic. I loved it. 5/5