This truly is an amazing peice of work. Wowww. The imagery is out of this world by far. Every line is detailed to the fullest extent I feel. My heart is thumping the wings of a humming bird wow. That is great imagery. I can imagine you in this whole area and you are nervous and your heart fluttering so fast and you can barely breathe at all. Is she worth it?
Who really knows until they take the plunge into marriage I know we are all scared but I think it is worth it if you are actually marrying her!
I love yhe way this plays out. The story behind it is so great and heartfelt in yhe sad way of course. Again after you been told she is shot I can imagine everything. You falling to your knees and crying with makeup running down your face. And you running out of the place almost like she left you at the alter.
I think there are two main parts to this though. The beginning which is the set up to the downfall. And the downfall when she gets told. Its kinda like there are two stories being told here. You did an amazing job all around. 5/5