Comments : Crimson Seduction.

  • 4 years ago

    by Sigoney Holder

    Chills.

  • 4 years ago

    by Lemon

    There is a small spelling error "I just wanr to let all the colors of the world pass" should be 'want'. Aside from that, the description that you pour into this is flawless. It's vivid without being crude, gives a really strong sense of pure, raw feeling.

    You describe each aspect of the lover in such a unique and imaginative way "His kiss decimates my will" which makes the poem seem all the more personal because each description is tailored exactly to him and how he makes the narrator feel.

    "Never have I acted like this unable to walk away," I think this line needs some punctuation "Never have I acted like this; unable to walk away," perhaps? Or a colon would work fine as well :).

    Wonderful poem, you wrap up the feelings of seduction brilliantly. 5/5 :)

    • 4 years ago

      by TragicChaos

      Thank you so much for your kind words. I am glad that you enjoyed this piece. Thank you aso for pointing out the things that I seemed to have looked over when I was posting this. Thank also for the 5/5. :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    This poem is amazing. I absolutely love it. You have so much emotion in the words you use to describe your feelings.