Again girls, you write so well together and this is another piece that holds meaning and a part of you both. The faith and religious aspect in this is evident and to both of you, very important and that came across strongly.

I'm not sure about the first part, something seems off to me, but can't quite put my finger on it.

And this part.

He cries out to a God he disobeys in hopes
Christ blesses him with some kind of love,

Seems like there's a word missing somewhere.

Though that may all be typing errors.

I love the story in this and the deeper meaning. As usual you've combined yourselves and written a great piece.

Awesome ladies :)