Wow, I don't know where to begin. This is hitting home. Not being comfortable praying, biting your lips, remaining neutral, pain, hurt. It is the true reality and often I wonder myself if there is anything we can do about it. I guess we have to accept things for what the are.
4 years ago
I see how the song "Crawling" is related to this piece. I love their music and definitely understand how wonderful it can be as inspiration when you aren't even looking.
As to the piece, I love the descriptions. I feel the shoes of both characters and understand what it's like to be in both places (just the thought of knowing someone else wants my pain because they cant see me with it myself)
I love the details, your actions throughout the piece and the way you chose to describe your discomfort and your feelings trying to remain neutral in a situation that is just too difficult for that.
You penned yet another wonderful piece, great job.
I dont know why, but this seems so different from your normal style... I like it!
It's odds though, because I don't find this sad, I almost feel like its misc, because it houses so much it can't be classified as one thing lol...you got frustration, awkwardness, sadness, a sense of desire since you wish to trade places or take some of the pain...
There's so much in this poem but oh my gosh have I been through it. I'm always the friend wishing to be that one who can take away pain, who has to say 'Do what makes you happy' even when disagreeing sometimes.
Well done on this, seems random, but random works.