= dandelion's kiss, because the kiss belongs to the dandelion.
Other than these 2 things, I thought the poem was very well put together. It is nice to see you use a form again, and especially one that is not as common as others, and one that is very hard to pull off.
I really enjoyed your wording of this( yes, especially since there was a mention of rainbows ;) )
But the nature held within this is beautiful, and you worded it so smoothly, so easy to imagine the peaceful feeling and views that nature holds.
I really like your line:
I grew passionate under beauty's bliss.
I think it is clear that the writer really connects themselves to the poem here, and the idea of bliss inside beauty, belonging to beauty, is just very unique, yet simple.
Very creative poem, with a very creative title too, it really drew me in, and I just couldn't think of what the poem would hold from that title.
WHOOOOOOOOOT! Thank you so much Saffie for those corrections!!! and for your lovely comment! Hugs you!
4 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
Wowwwwwww!!!!!!!. I give you so so so much respect for writing a sonnet. Let alone a Shakespeare one. There is so much emotion you write about here. The use of nature is beautiful and I loved how you make nature out to be a person. Perhaps it is you who fell in love with nature since the day you were born. My favorite line from here is dandelion's kiss. That is the point where is seems you fell in love. Another reason I loved this is because you can interpret it in so many ways. And as a reader that really makes you think. But I'm a nature lover so I enjoyed this very much. :). Wish I could nominate. You did such a great job.
4 years ago
by Tara Kay
I read this on Facebook and was immediately blown away. As always Andrea, it's beautiful.
You're nature pieces really do make me smile, they're just so pretty.
I love how you wrote this, and the form used...that is one hard form to master and you do it beautifully.
So serene, smooth and just makes me smile and feel warm and springlike.
I'll try again to leave a comment...this is the third attempt...anyone else having problems commenting on nature poems?
I love you title Andrea and feel it ties in very well with the contents of this sonnet. Moss is so old but still very beautiful in my eyes...so many different shades that give it a certain depth and, I think that's what you were aiming for here?
Perhaps the young carefree persona at the start of this would be a light shade of moss and...as it matured it became darker as life dealt cards that were unexpected?
I'm not sure of the significance of the last two lines...maybe it's some ritual that I'm unaware of but the image seems like a peaceful ending of some sort...
Congrats on the win...sorry I never got to this one sooner and....Hope my comment reaches you this time :)
To take on a sonnet is an achievement all on its own, Once I read through this once I knew I was going to score this, just had to pick where to place it. I love the whole nature theme of this and I believe that the writer of this piece does also. Every little scene is perfectly painted and the imagery of each line is crammed well despite the syllable restrictions. Some of the stand out lines are line three. This line says so much for me and it is nice to be able to relate to a poem in this way. The best line though has to be "stalking rainbows becomes a hopeful sin"
So true and makes me think of how we all dream of something better, it is the clock that keeps us all ticking over. We all have some reference in our daily lives that keeps us moving on, whether it be the hopes of winning the lottery or finding true love. Maybe just the next holiday or the next soccer game.
I have written many sonnets and I know that they can be a pain, but this is effortless and so I have chosen to award 10 points for this. Well done.