You seem so lonely as your world collapses around you. The sadness is overwhelming you and flowing into you. Your situation seems so Grimm and so sad that it's as if you lose yourself in it.
4 years ago
I am so sorry for whatever inspired this piece, but thank you for writing what I have been trying for so long to pen. I am glad you allowed the emotion or situation or idea to flow through words and create something so beautiful yet heartrending. This piece is amazing in its sorrow... very well written and well worth the nomination in the weekly contest.
The first line caught my eye immediately when scanning through the poetry this week. What a start. How many of us feel like this. That we do not truly know who we are or what our point is. Why do we exist to scrape by day to day? There is so much sadness in this piece, I also love the scattering of imagery, some great details that tell a sad story. A very mature piece by somebody so young. Great write and worthy of 10 points.