Bewitching Bane (Haiku)

by Sylvia   Jul 8, 2014


Exquisite blossoms
Nerium Oleander
Seasons toxicant

1st Place Club Haiku Contest

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Definitions
bane Noun
1 a person or thing that causes misery or distress (esp in the phrase bane of one's life )
2 something that causes death or destruction
3 a fatal poison
4 ruin or distress

toxicant Noun
a toxic substance; poison
a rare word for intoxicant
Adjective
poisonous; toxic

Haiku (also called nature or seasonal haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all. Haiku is usually written in the present tense and focuses on nature (seasons).

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  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is wonderful. I always find haiku hard to write - they seem to end up more on the senryu side! Such a powerful piece in so few lines.
    All the very best
    Ben

  • 3 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I decided to grant this breathtaking Haiku as my 10 choice this week, it's hands down one of the prettiest and creative Haikus I have read in quite some time.

    Haiku's are small yes, but can be tricky to write, due to the syllable restriction but also, the wording has to be captivating, exciting and unique and Sylvia has done that and much more with this piece.

    I was mesmerized by the wording of this poem, and I am also drawn to poisonous flowers for some reason so I couldn't help but get sucked into this piece. The title ties in nicely with this piece as well.
    Truly beautiful piece this week by Sylvia!

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Double post sorry.

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Wow this is such a powerful haiku Sylvia.

    First line- I believe the title fits perfectly with the poem itself. This line holds such great wording and imagery. You can see clearly a beautiful bouquet of flowers.

    Second line- This is where the twist in the haiku comes in. The poison of the flower. This is where the title comes in mostly especially the bane part.

    Ending- This is what makes the haiku I feel, you have the time frame of the seasons and you did an excellent job with the wording here. Beautiful write overall, probably one of the better haiku's I've seen. 5/5

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Now there is something that I've learnt! I appreciate the information which made the reading of the Haiku even more meaningful and vivid...well penned!