Comments : Memories:

  • 3 years ago

    by Jerry Bolton

    I found the absence of the comma troubling. You used punctuation, but only at the end of your lines. Line 7 could use a coma between the words "mind," and "marking." Likewise line 10 needs a comma between the words "moment," and "a." Also line 12 "mind" and "stopping."

    This is my first comment here and I don't want to upset poets, but I just had to point these things out.