Comments : Untitled (Chain Senryu)

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Another powerful write, I feel in this one you have lost yourself, and long to find that person you once were, but you struggle to do so, and wonder if you will ever get her back.

    I like how you bluntly state this in the poem by using your name! I also thought it was well thought out to use a form for this poem, it worked well, and especially liked your second line in your first stanza,

    You. Took. Everything. From. Me.

    ^ that really did stand out, and I guess if there was one line that was so important ant it would be this one, because that is probably the reason you did lose yourself, and probably why still you have not completely found yourself again.

    Shame it doesn't have a title yet, but I am sure you will come up with one soon enough.