Comments : Stone cold

  • 2 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    This is powerful. Harsh and brutally honest.

    We wear masks and deliver Oscar performances daily. Our public persona is fun, is beautiful and is loved...

    But away from admiring eyes the mask is thrown, the script burned and all that is left is real.

    I love how yoy describe the distain of this real. I say again, powerful!

    Well done.

    Michael

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This really is excellent indeed. I - dare I say it - can, or certainly have been able, to relate to that kind of person. We too often put our best foot forward in public, scared that people won't accept us for who we really are. The terrifying thing is though, sometimes, deep down, we are unworthy of acceptance.
    This poem is a very stark reality check for too many people and the inherent truth and darkness of it is only limited by the reader's acceptance of that reality: How awful can that nice guy next door really be? Doesn't bare thinking about, does it?
    I know that this was written from a more emotional viewpoint - putting on a face to deal with life - but I guess my rant stems from the same idea....
    All the very best
    Ben

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you both for your commebts, I appreciate it.

      And Ben, yes it was written from an emotional POV but it can apply to any situation. We master the art of pretend, sometimes even between you and your own being. We sugar coat thing we cant accept, we buryy the ugly truth under mountains of nonsense so no one would see, and no one would judge. And yes, how awful can any nice person truly be?!

  • 2 years ago

    by Cindy

    Wow....that's the feeling that came to me after reading your poem.
    How many of us hide behind a mask? Scared to not be accepted for who we really are.
    Excellent job!
    Take care Cindy

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you for the comment :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    My judging comment:
    Once again Meme has produced a masterpiece depiction of a dysfunctional relationship. I would almost ask her to do lighthearted stuff instead, but it would be like asking Salvador Dali to do court portraits. She is so good at it that the surreal aspects of the images are surpassed by their very humanness spilling out between the lines. This monologue is quietly spoken, softening the man to whom she directs it like a gentle massage, settling him down and bringing him to the point of relaxation - then confounds him with his incapacity to return such loving gestures. Cold, yes, stone heart, yes, but how can it not melt in such a presence of warmth?

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      I think this is the best comment I have ever received. You understood exactly what I meant to deliever, thank you so much for the comment Larry!

  • 2 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    I like this poem Meme and your take on life, and the different masks that we all wear in our daily lives.
    As you say, we all master the art of pretend, which I guess is part of what makes us human.
    This is an interesting poem that I'm sure strikes a chord with many of us. Well done!

  • 2 years ago

    by Maher

    I'm currently in a situation that has made me cold, especially toward relationships. With the exception of the last stanza, but the inclusion of the last 3 lines of the piece - you've summed me up the way I am right now.

    You've either used some form of magic, or you're just good at what you do. I'd say it's the latter. Awesome write :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Meme

    Thanks for the comments :)

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    There is a certain honesty in this piece that makes it all the more easy to be captivated by. It is well written in a unique clash of simplicity and detailed imagery alongside such a strong voice that really makes this piece all the more interesting. Very well penned. Beautiful. 

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks alot for the comment :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Bob Shank

    Very vivid images you have painted here, the content, the flow and the message jelled nicely. As someone else stated, the Masks were well represented